The Aftermath of an Orgasm - Comments

So I was on here about to make a layout for my new short story (to which the first half is already on dA), and I somehow ended up rereading the last chapter of this story. I forgot how brilliant and awesome and perfect it is. I'm feeling a little inspired. Maybe I'll write the next chapter sometime soon.

Very, very interesting. This seems like an actual book. The names are so unique, and even though I sure as heck can't pronounce them I really like 'em. It's all a very cool idea. I want to see what the whole deal with this kind of psychic lady is. Gypsy, rather. That's cool.

Baha, I love the mushrooms.

Whoa, so many twists! Awesome. xD We have to talk about this a little before I write more.

Hey! You changed the layout again! You should slightly increase the darkness of the link color. I can't read it on my laptop except at funny angles.

Hahaha, I love it! It's so incredibly perfect.

The layout is cute. It reminds me of babies. o.o

I like this, a lot. The descriptions rock.

Okay, I'll have to admit, you had me hooked until chapter one. The only reason I stopped reading is because its almost one in the morning and my mind can't process hard to pronounce names at this hour.

Your story line is original, definitely one of the very limited true originals here. The layout's alright, althought the overlapping of the lines in some places of the story sort of pissed me off (although that might just be the one o'clock crabbiness talking).

Flow, imagery and style get twenty out of ten. Originality, definitely a tenner. You're pretty talented. :)

Woah, this is such an original idea.
I read the Preface and chapter one.
I love it, everything is so perfect about it.
I also love how the names are made up. :)
I subbed!

Firstly, the layout was epic.
The relation of the Big Bang was also epic and the writing itself was direct and engaging.
Nice :]

Oh, and the chapter was wonderfully written. ^^

Oooh, nice! It sort of reminded me of Reggie in the fearscape in The Devouring.
So something terrible happened on her birthday that I'll be writing out?

EKKK! You posted a chapter!
Haha, now I'm going to back up slowly and read the chapter.

The end of chapter six reminded me of the Goosebumps book The Beast From the East.

This is hilarious. I love this story - it's creative. Kelly and Chelsea teamng up like this probably one of the best things you guys have done. I hope this doesn't turn out like Sunrise Sunset.

The preface was very creative. Chelsea, you are an excellent writer. I like the characters, even though the humans are a bunch of teenagers hyped on 'shrooms. The nudist thing is an interesting detail. It was amusing how in almost every sentence Dick said 'fuck'.

Kelly, you have improved much on your writing. I'm proud of you. When I started reading your chapter, I couldn't help but smile to see that there were mytholgical creatures in the story. That's your strong suit - monsters and creatures. Remember that. Keep on a-writin'!

You're going to see what I come up with??? D: Why would you want to do such a thing?

I feel like I'm becoming dependent on you to give me all my ideas. :/

Whoa, I just realized that you posted five chapters so far while I only posted two. o.o I need to catch up!

AWWEEEEESSOME!
I love the graphic imagery. It was exciting. :D
Only problem now is that I have to think of what I'm going to write for the next chapter. Hah. Whoops.

this is jaw droppingly fantastic. keep it up
update soon(:

You took off the chapter titles?