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  • roe.

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    I like this so far. The prologue was kind of short, though.

    Another thing is that you have a mistake, here.

    You were everything I ever stood for," He said, unable to keep his eyes on me.

    It should be, "You were everything I ever stood for," he said, unable to keep his eyes on me.

    But other than that, I'm looking forward to reading more . :)
    April 27th, 2010 at 09:30pm
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