Chapter One- I love the way you write. The sentences flow terribly nicely with each other, every word is used correctly and the description of the characters is simply and elegant. The only thing that bothered me was that you used 'dunno' alot and I'm not sure if that's how the character simply is or for lack of other words. Other than that, it was an amazing chapter. Keep up the good work! I'll be reviewing chapter two once I'm done reading it. :3
I'll be reviewing chapter two once I'm done reading it. :3