Alfie - Comments

Gorgeous

Oh god, this was so beautiful. In five short chapters, I have already fallen for Alfie (I can't help but think of the youtuber, Alfie Deyes) and how he wants someone he can't have and the guy he is in love with is with somebody else. You captured that feeling of want and love so effortlessly and the ending was just so sweet when he broke up with his girlfriend for Alfie. The description in this is just perfection and you write perfection and I am off to go read the sequels to these because this is just ugh, amazing.

This was so amazing, and I'm not quite sure what to do with myself. Shit, I wish I could write as well as you did in the character description. I loved that almost as much as I did the actual story. I mean, I'm going to have to agree with Palliser, for five hundred words this is a lot better than everything else on this site. So yeah. I subscribed, because I'll be rereading this loads of times, because you know. This was pretty fucking fantastic.

This was so good!
I really loved it.
It was adorable and sad and happy..
I just really loved it :)

This was adorable. I enjoyed the format. It was short and simple, but sweet, you know? Very refreshing. :) I loved the line about the hickey fading, too, "the tissue repairing itself daily, distancing him further away from me with each new cell". Great writing.

uhhhhh. :l

speechless?.. this is good.
shit, this is better than the
majority of the crap floating
all around here; and it's like
five hundred words, right?

I AM SO SORRY FOR TAKING SO LONG TO COMMENT
somehow a bunch of my subscriptions disapeared and i didn't even realize :(

BUT YES THEY GOT TOGETHER, i'm so happy.
i love the last line, forgiven in a heartbeat. this was so sweet.

OH WOW, I SEE WHAT YOU MEAN ABOUT THIS ALFIE BEING LIKE THE ALFIE.

This was amazing, amazing, amazing and I loved every word.

Oh, I sure did love it!
It was so way beyond cute !

[:

-Dies-
I adore this so much<333
xo

That was so cute...!!! :D

Yay, everything ended well :D
I'm glad for Alfie and him.
This was awesome.

oh snap you see that font size ?
my bad my bad

butbut yes i adore this to no end.

ONE MORE CHAPTER

i'm getting so attached to these, i don't want it to end.
you should definitly do another one; but no pressure hehe

poor alfie though, in love with a boy who obviously doesn't return the dedication.
will he get closure ?? or be heartbroken ?!
i can't wait to see haha. i'm in love with this.

I love the way you write this. It's so unique!

Ohmygosh.
:O
-Dun dun dunnnn-
xD
Psh. Sucks for you.
Gave him up you little sucker.
LEAVE HER.
... :)

oh snap oh snap oh snap.

sometimes you have to be selfish and demand what you want, right ?
so is he really wrong in wanting him to leave his girlfriend ?

but just, ugh, i enjoy this to know end.
you are so lovely, these little chapters are lovely.

I really like this(:
More?<333
xo

I love how simple these are, yet they say so much <3
This is wonderful.

oh, another one in this format.
i enjoy these (: