Oh god, this was so beautiful. In five short chapters, I have already fallen for Alfie (I can't help but think of the youtuber, Alfie Deyes) and how he wants someone he can't have and the guy he is in love with is with somebody else. You captured that feeling of want and love so effortlessly and the ending was just so sweet when he broke up with his girlfriend for Alfie. The description in this is just perfection and you write perfection and I am off to go read the sequels to these because this is just ugh, amazing.
This was so amazing, and I'm not quite sure what to do with myself. Shit, I wish I could write as well as you did in the character description. I loved that almost as much as I did the actual story. I mean, I'm going to have to agree with Palliser, for five hundred words this is a lot better than everything else on this site. So yeah. I subscribed, because I'll be rereading this loads of times, because you know. This was pretty fucking fantastic.
This was adorable. I enjoyed the format. It was short and simple, but sweet, you know? Very refreshing. :) I loved the line about the hickey fading, too, "the tissue repairing itself daily, distancing him further away from me with each new cell". Great writing.
i'm getting so attached to these, i don't want it to end. you should definitly do another one; but no pressure hehe
poor alfie though, in love with a boy who obviously doesn't return the dedication. will he get closure ?? or be heartbroken ?! i can't wait to see haha. i'm in love with this.