Merry-Go-Round - Comments

I'll love you forever and ever if you update this amazing story.

I really liked this.
I didn't really like how we didn't get to know the main character before she killed herself, but it seems like the plot kind of needed that.
The writing is really good. I found a few mistakes, but it didn't distract me from the story at all so that's a good thing.
The layout turned me off though. It hurt my eyes because it was so bright.

It just seems...really odd to me that this character would kill herself within the first few paragraphs. That alone, turned me off to your story. The writing itself is pretty good, but the plot doesn't interest me.

Well this is interesting, I can't think of anything to say because I agree with all of the above. Some of the descriptions are just lovely, the characters are really coming through in the latter chapters and its great to see the repurcussions of her death. You do need to proof read a bit more there are quite a few typos but overall its a really intriuging idea. I think its a topic that has been done a lot like in the lovely bones but this is unique at the same time. Well done :D

Oh, evil cliff-hanger. >.<
That's all I have to say today :)

This is amazing so far. I really can't wait to see what happens next.

Great story so far =]
The writing style and perspective really keep me interested!
More would be great!

I like it. It's similar to Lovely Bones, but yet so different, and I like that. <3
Keep it going, you can tell that you're putting a lot of good effort into this. :D

I like it. It's similar to Lovely Bones, but yet so different, and I like that. <3
Keep it going, you can tell that you're putting a lot of good effort into this. :D

Hmm...this is very intresting.

I like this.....

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I really like it. I really do.
It's well written and it flows really smoothly.
I didn't find any grammar errors.
I'm subscribing to this because it interests me alot.
I like the way you wrote this and how the chapter titles are really simple
and how the titles relate to the chapter itself

From reading the first thing you've written, I can tell that you've progressed a little with your writing style. I can also tell that this is a completely different story from the first - the narration is completely different.

The story idea is something different, something I've not read before, and I think that so far, you're doing an amazing job with it.

This is a very interesting idea.
You've got a great start here, though I've only read the first chapter.
It's very well written. :]
Though the layout is very much a turn off.
Only for me though, or not I don't know.
I'm so shallow when it comes to what I read.

Ooh, I really love this! Write more because I'm so curious now. Great choices in names as well, and the whole plot is very interesting so far. A typo here in there to be fixed, but regardless well written :)

There were a few mistakes, but they were just minor typos. The scene at the dinner table was so heartbreaking. It made me sad and kind of worried if that would happen when I get married. Dx
I really like how you insert little details about people, like how Tabby hides her happiness. It makes things more realistic. :)

This is a really cool concept! Can't wait for more!

This is really interesting. The plot has me hooked (I'm going to subscribe) and your writing is very descriptive as well. My only criticism is that there are a few typos here and there throughout the story and also I'd space out the last chapter (I believe it's chapter 4) because it's hard to read when it's all condensed like that.

Other than that i really enjoyed this =)

Saw this from your journal. :)
There are a few typos here and there. Not too many though.
At first it reminded me of Veronika Decides to Die, but it's different.
I really like the mood this is in. I mean, after the first chapter, the pacing is nice and slow, not in a hurry. Just chill. I like it so far. It would be great if you continue this!

I know I've left a comment on this before, but I can't stop reading it! The whole concept is amazing and I love the descriptions of everything (: <3

Smart plot. :) I love the way that you described things in this and your whole idea for this story.