Princess is No Name I Deserve - Comments

I read your story for about 5 times and still not that extraordinary. There are many comma splices, some run-on sentences, and even grammatical errors.
The plot is your typical cinema plot line which is common.
Character: Princess' conversation has really the character which I see in a girl. Good job on her character
Some notes I've taken:
1. (Mom kept her maiden name, even after she married Dad, Spencer Cooper.) This is a run-on sentence but the thought is really happening in the reality!
2.Dating is a Dangerous Game - The most intriguing and catchy chapter title i've seen so far! It kept me jumping to conclusion 'til i read the chapter itself!
(For a long time, anything he said about me would be taken as fact. I had to start my own blog to dispell rumors.) Another sentence which is really used by celebrities in the reality.
3. The chapters 1-5 are used for the background of the starlett, Princess. The story really entered by the time she got her disguise in chapter 6 and onwards.
4.(Here we are, ladies,) wrong comma splicing
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Tips: You have the concept already why not adding up more creativity. Your readers will crave more! It's not bad to put twist and turns during the fifth chapter . You need to play around your story and polish it. And when I say polishing, it's about your grammatical errors. Best wishes and keep on writing! :)

"The story seems quite average. It's your typical cinema plot line. But still, you managed to keep your readers interested. Hence, good job!"

-PaoloDavid about 5 hours ago

It seems like the comment swap didn't read my comment so I'll add up more. Maybe it's a sign that your work should be commented more. Your chapter names are intriguing and catchy. Keep on writing my friend :)

Comment Swap:

I've been wanting to read a story like this, where it's a story about someone considered amazing but its about someone that isn't them at all. I read the first chapter and I'll continue tomorrow

This seems like a really interesting story! You have nice descriptions and your storyline is really interesting. Usually, you hear stories about the model, so it's nice to hear about the daughter of the model. You have a nice, fluid writing style, which makes this a wonderful read! :D

* Comment swap

I thought the summary was good and you have an interesting plot line here. You have some nice details going as well. I really like the idea of model's daughter and not wanting to be part of the life.

Awesome story so far. :) I like these stories about people who are wealthy. It sounds neat, and really creative as well. :)

i love it thx 4 the update
cnt wait 4 the next chap

i lov this!
update!
:)

I like how you flesh out the characters, very three dimensional. :D

it's awsome hope you can update soon. I can't wait

XD Thanks I'll fix it now. :)

Ooohh, I like your story so far! Just pointing out a few mistakes you did on the latest chapter, making words italics is not it's . Sorry, just sayin' but I do look forward for the next chapter! :)

This made me laugh a bit.
I agree with the other girl though, you are a very good writer.
I want more
so keep on writing hahha
x

I adore this! I'm a sucker for any of these sorts of privileged youth gone wrong stories. I can't wait to see more. And it was excellently written (a bit of a rarity on this site lol). Grand job of it!