Too Late for What-Ifs - Comments

I really liked this! It was short and sweet and a great read. Because of how the emotions were describe dI found it super easy to relate to your character. Her anger, sadness, and hurt were all realistic. I myself have been cheated on and things for me played out much like the did in your story so I coukd see myself throwing those flowers out. I really love your style of writing too. Keep up the good work!

I agree. Your emotion was very good, and your imagery is very good as well. I am not generally a fan of the "in-the-moment" narration, but I think I can make an exception since your sentences are so intricate.

"The words blurt out from him quickly, spilling onto the floor in front of him, seeping into the cracks in the floorboards." I love this sentence. it's just really good.

"not wanting to hear him. Hear his lies, hear his bullshit, hear his fake, broken promises." This sentence should be "not wanting to hear him- hear his lies, hear his bullshit...etc.

This is really good and I hope that you continue to write it. Good Luck!

The emotion was very well-portrayed. And I loved this part: The words blurt out from him quickly, spilling onto the floor in front of him, seeping into the cracks in the floorboards. It reminds me of a song by Saves the Day. :) Good job

~I'm judging for this contest~

Firstly: the rules. The link to my contest was there, and grammatically, you were all correct. The layout was okay; too unoriginal, unlike the story. Having your own background to a story makes it that much more personal, so I think it would have been better if it had looked more original. It’s a statement for the writing, in a way.

The writing was good. I enjoyed it quite a lot. One of the first phrases I saw made me smile. I actually thought “that’s brilliant”, as I read it. It really set up the character whom it was describing:
“Instead of the usual cocksure arrogance..”

This whole next paragraph I’m quoting really related to me, and I loved the way you wrote it. I could swear, I’ve said the exact same words before. It almost feels personal or based on a personal experience, and it really adds empathy for the character:
“.. laugh bitterly. "Yeah, I still love you, so fucking much. But I can't trust you anymore. Yeah, we could get back together, try to sort things out. But things would be too different, never be how they were. You'd try too hard, I'd always wonder if you'll do it again. It wouldn't last. And the fact is you're too proud to be sorry, proud you nearly got away with it."”

Well done! Be sure to keep checking the competition page for the results!

Hm, yes yes. Very well played out; actually it reminds me of my ex boyfriend in a way. (:

I liked it. (:

The anger from Samantha was done really well, I think. Kudos to that, cause I felt it.

"Something beaks, and I turn back to face him, blood pounding." Is that supposed to be "Something breaks" or do I need to look up a word? That's not a far fetched thing for me, that's why I'm giving us the benefit of the doubt.

Very nice. Like I said I loved how you wrote her feelings cause I really felt it. ♥