One Drink Too Many - Comments

Totally love this story. Puts a meaningful perspective on what people in these situations go through!

amazing!
It took my breath away and gave me chills

You've definately touched some serious issues here, and it is really sad that your friend is going through them. You've done a very realistic representation of the situation and it definately reflects how you're feeling. well written and well structured.

This was amazing. I really liked how this kind of went with Osh's actual past with alcohol. I really hope your friend gets through all of this hardship. Everything I basically want to say has been summed up by the people who commented above me. Again, great job :)

wow that story was amazing.
i can only imagine what that would be like to be going through something like that.
i hope everything works out for the best for your friend and i think you did an amazing job with this story

This one-shot actually gave me a slight fright only because not only did you base this on a similar situation because the realism of the situation.
I think that given TJ's past with underage drinking that his character suited the role in the story. He had a party boy reputation from college too so that contributes to his character in the story.
I think that the details you included makes the story even more realistic and the way the story progresses along with the time line makes it seem even more realistic and accurate as to what would occur in this type of situation.
I like how the end of the one-shot ends not with instant forgiveness to TJ but, him promising to earn back his wife's trust and proving himself to her and their children. I think that it's more believable that way then.
Overall great details and believable time line to the story.

Wow - you tackled a really tough subject. Glad to see it had a happy ending and I hope it does for your friend too.

Glad to see she was responsible for her children and left despite that she is in love with her husband. All those emotions get really confused in a situation like this.

It's hard to write a story that isn't all roses with romance as the main topic, mostly because it won't be popular, but I give you a ton of credit for doing it. Well done!