If Your Parents Didn't Approve of Me Then, Why Would They Approve of Me Now - Comments

I'm just...really, I don't even know...

Now, this is classic Quizilla and Mibba =/= Quizilla by any means. Because I edit many peoples' writing, I felt the need to edit yours as well. I didn't take out anything, only fixed it grammatically and added italics. If you're new and don't know, italics are done by using [ i ] and ending with [ / i ] but without the spaces.

It has been a year since I last saw him. I heard he has a girlfriend now so I figured I should stay away for a while, but that all changed when he called me the other night asking why I broke up with him in the first place. I wouldn't dare answer him.
“Tarin, are you still there? Tarin?”
“V, I have to go.”
“Oh. I guess I'll call and talk to you some other time.”
“Ok. Bye.”
“Bye, Tarin.”
Why did I just do that? I really need to talk to him.
“Tarin…”
“Hi.”
“Hey, um what are you doing here at this time of night?”
“I need to tell you something very important.”
“What? That I am nothing but a gangbaning idiot?”
“No, and I am so sorry about that. It's just that my parents would never understand. They made me break up with you and my brother told them about you, that you weren't a gang member and that you treated me with better respect than all the other guys I have dated.”
“Get out of here. You don't mean that.”
“Viskey, this isn't like you.”
“Well neither is this.”
Then he slammed the door in my face and then I left and two months later I got a call saying that V wanted to see me and that he was sorry for what he did. I feel so lost without V in my life.
I really don’t know why love is this complicated.
“Tarin, Viskey will see you now.”
“Ok. Thank you Mrs. Sevani.”
“Tarin, I'm so sorry for doing that to you. I ran into your brother and all the things that you said to me two months ago turned out to be true.”
“It's ok V. You want to give our relationship another shot?”
“Sure as long as your parents approve.”
“Believe me babe, they do.”
“Really? You’re serious?”
“Yeah, and oh I love you.”
“I love you too, Tarin.”
Then V kissed me passionately on the lips and it was so…wow!
Since then we graduated high school and V went on to form the boyband NLT and I became a model for Vogue.

I won't even get into what's wrong with this other than it could never happen. It's incredibly shallow with absolutely no plot and no character depth. All I know is that these are teenagers who are dating and having relationship issues, I guess? You didn't explain anything. One shots can be this short but in this about of space most would expect more out of it.

Why don't you go take a fucking seat while I school your ass in GRAMMAR.

This motherfucking bitch is called the SHIFT KEY and he isn't fucking around. You use this fucker when you start sentences to show you mean motherfucking serious shit. You also use this badass manbeast when writing someone's name to show these fuckers mean shit to the goddamn world.

Let's take a look at this other hoebag called the ENTER/RETURN KEY. This motherfuck separates the goddamn lines so they don't beat the living shit out of each other. Use this cunt after someone opens that fucking hole in their face. Don't mix the fucking speech in with the other useless fucking words in the goddamn paragraph. They'll fuck each other up and slaughter the reader's eyes.

Now, for the last lesson on Goddamn Grammar School, you don't use the fucking apostrophe for the motherfucking quotations because that just makes you look like a goddamn dipshit. You always use quotation marks so you don't look like you've got fucking Down Syndrome you fuckass.

You're doing it wrong.