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  • XXXXXXXXXXX

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    You need to space it out a little bit! But besides that it was very good!
    I'm subscribing! :)
    May 11th, 2010 at 11:34pm
  • Geek In The Pink

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    this looks good, but like crazy heart said, you do need to space it out, it would make it alot easier to read and understand, as it gets a bit hard to tell who is speaking some of the time...
    any ways.. keep going, it looks good
    May 11th, 2010 at 06:42pm
  • crazy beautiful;

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    Sounds good. For you're first story.
    Just maybe put paragraphs & stuff, so I can read it easily.
    And so you don't get reported. :D
    May 11th, 2010 at 11:13am
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