Rumored Nights - Comments

I loved it <3

I really like this, but if I could make a few suggestions?

For one, you say their names a lot, which isn't necessarily bad, but can interrupt the flow a bit. Pronouns are your friend. But keep in mind, simply 'he' and 'she' and 'they' all the time can be awkward too.

Also, it is a tad lengthy, but there's not much you can do about that. I mean, you want to get to the point, yet you don't want to rush into it, you know? It's a tricky thing, but something to think about.

Overall, it was really good =]

oooo, very intense. :] I like it. Stories of murder and betrayal and all.

This was amazing,
as depressing as it may be.
I really loved this(:
<3

This was a pretty good story ^.^ I like it. Keep writing working on things like the flow of the words; there were some parts that felt awkward. Then again, that is just my opinion. Can't wait to read more regardless!