Knock Me Out - Comments

This was too cute!

Thanks for this entry as well!

Amazing.
You're a really good writer.

I love this! I don't usually read things like this, but this was really good!

I usually don't read bandfics at all - but yours are so awesome x]
Actually, yours are the only ones that I'll ever read.
This has a really nice mood. The charries are awesome and so is the tone.
Lovely job <3

I agree with silk tea too about it feeling intoxicating and I really liked the use of 'with lips like morphine' it was chilling in a way. The writing is like hanging out for the girl to come and then when she does it is peaceful and beautiful - filled with desire. The feelings of both people are shown really well in such different ways and the connection between them was really imaginable. I like how you didn't explain why they hadn't seen each other for so long because it just let us focus on wanting to see them meet. Overall, really nice mood, tone and characters. Great job :D

Oh wow, I haven't listened to Kill Hannah in so long and I found myself searching the song to go along with the story.
It's the first song I ever heard by them and I fell in love.
I really like how it was written and listening to the song while reading it was just perfect.
Like silk tea. said, it has this sort of intoxicating feel to it :)

This was amazing.

I love Kill Hannah, well at least their music. I don't know any of the band members names.
Is Mat Devine the singer?

Lips Like Morphine was the first song I've ever heard by them and I was like...YES.
But I very much like how it felt like the song.
In my head I was singing to it while I read this, and it just seemed to work so very well.
It had that sort of intoxicating feel, like morphine.

Very well done.

I'm interested that you knew words in Latin seeing as it's pretty much a dead language.

Also, a few things.
Make sure you capitilize your title, Knock Me Out. If not it could get your reported.
gasping, he'd only ever met gasping;
scribbled thoughts and proses that could prose
which in theory appeared incomprehensible but to her felt like a gift. this in theory...
notes at the start, then he talked and then
However, he tread carefully when it treads
Someone who could blow a kiss that would leave him gasping, he'd only ever met one girl who could do that. gasping;
notes at the start, then he talked and then

WOW.I haven't really read any stories about Mat Devine(I think I spelled that right) but I love how you used Lips like morphine and put it into your story. :D