I really liked the writing style in this. There were parts that were a bit redundant, but they actually added to the story, I thought. I was surprised when I read in the author's note that this is your first time writing this style, it seems like you have a lot of natural skill for it. I loved the raw emotions, and how you sort of told it like it is, but at the same time it wasn't blunt. I particularly loved the last four paragraphs, the anger, desperation, and melancholy were amazing. The ending was beautifully sad, and I liked how it tied in with the title.
June 23rd, 2010 at 04:26pm