The Hazards of Love - Comments

This was so adorable!! I don't even fully know what to say, but I loved it!

~I'm judging for this contest~

Firstly: the rules. The link to my contest was there, and grammatically, you were all correct. The layout was nice, and, being a fan of Johnny myself, I loved the picture and characters.

The writing was what I call, the perfect balance. You didn’t spend a lifetime in description, but you didn’t miss details in the continuation of the story. You were successful in your attempt at empathy for the main character, but you didn’t drown us in her thoughts and feelings; Johnny was included as well. It was refreshing to read. It flowed. As with some other stories, I wasn’t skipping to get somewhere better or wondering what was going on, I just really enjoyed reading it.

I remember hoping part way through that he would tell her that loved her back. That, my friend, is me and my empathy for the main charterer. That’s hard to get and remain hold of in a story, but this was done well.

Well done! Be sure to keep checking the competition page for the results!

I like how the ending is sweet.
Most fanfics like this usually end sweetly, but I like the way you ended this one despite that fact.
The writing is really good. I like how you write.
The line:
Johnny’s lips met mine, and I knew I should have pulled away from him, but I could not do it. My head was telling me it was wrong, yet my heart told me it was right; it was perfect.
was really good. It was my favorite line.
This was a really good story.
Wonderful job.

Wow..first comment whoot! lol. I haven't seen a Johnny Depp story on this site yet. You have a great start and I am looking forward to reading the next chapter!