First off, the summary and the title of the first chapter itself were gorgeous, I particularly loved the latter of the two. It's not very often that I see a dream starting off the story pulled off well, but this story was an exception. I loved how it didn't end with something that would leave you ending up jolting awake, it was just a gentle, romantic dream. I got quite a good idea of who Phoebe is by the descriptions you gave of her, and I think that the name you chose for the character is very fitting, as well as the comparisons between her and the moon. I love the way you incorporated your three words into the story, it was very lyrical.
June 23rd, 2010 at 04:23pm
