Chalk. - Comments

So it's really cute, and sad.

The layout's awesome. I can read it. Holy cow.

It seems to me you do a lot more telling opposed to showing.

Collin Lewis sat at his dining room table, eating his eggs and toast, while watching the morning news. This was how it always was. He was single, and in his early thirties, living alone. He had always thought of himself as a sorry excuse of a man. Collin had spent his early years pushing away any female that had tried to come onto him, all except for one. As the thought came, he stopped himself from thinking of it any longer, for it would only hurt him more.

That's a tonne of telling.

Try to show people instead?

I really like the idea, it's super cute!

That was unbelievably sad and heartbreaking.

I love how you used Rise Against lyrics in the summary. That was awesome.
I love how you started and ended the story, and your descriptions. I love the idea of it, too. It was wonderful.

Oh man. First off, this is really good. Several spelling issues, but nothing extreme.
Your layout is great, and the banner/summary completely draw you in. The story too, is something you can't stop reading, because you're so eager to discover more (In fact, I still want to know more :P) You managed to create a fully story of two lifetimes in less than 1000 words, which is amazing, and the way you tied it in with chalk just made it that much more poignant.
Great job!

First Impression: The layout is nice. :)
It's readable and nicely accenting to the picture you chose. <3

That has got to be the worst morning ever--I'd go as far as to say horrid.

Clara was obsessed with chalk. She was always outside, either drawing on the pavement, or playing hop-scotch. She could never have enough.

This was a very cute thing. It made the story all the more adorable.<3
I find myself absolutely adoring the little character of Alex, as well.

This in truth was a very nice little story. I enjoyed reading all nine-hundred or so words because they all conveyed the hard-work you obviously put into this. I'm a total nut-case for detail so this is just a win-win. <3

I didn't notice any spelling mistakes or grammar ones so that just added to the hype your nice writing style and this story's easy-going flow. It was so easy to catch on to the pace of this and continue reading all through-out.

The only thing that bothered me in even the slightest was the fact that we have no idea why this woman killed herself. Surely, there's got to be a reason why such an astoundingly thought of woman offed herself? I think you focused entirley too much on the relationship and thus left a few loose ends. On a totally contradicting side, I know some people don't usually tell anyone why they're going to kill themselves, but usually there's a cliche note at most. Maybe it's just me that's bothered by this, aha, so feel free to ignore it.

Like I said, this story is amazing and I would def. love to read more of your works.
Amazing.<3

wow so sad i like it... could I use it as a story lol

This was so sad!! Ugh!! trying to make me cry, and stuff =.=
xD