Okay, I love the sayings at the beginning and end of the chapters. In the first chapter I was kinda confused at what was going on, but it was still pretty decent. I think you might eventually want to go back through and add more to it though *shrugs* Like I know what to suggest, its your story. ^^ The second chapter was a bit better...I will say. Hope the third comes out soon? Maybe? lol
June 20th, 2010 at 06:33am