Ela-Ishtel(Star Palace) - Comments

Stop bragging, I got school until July fifth, plus exams this week... ah, the joy [sarcasm]

I liked the chapter, although Deekon is quite a douche towards Alexander. It wasn't really his fault about Jack, it was Jack's awesome hero personality XD *hugs Jack* Yeah, I love him. n_n Why'd he had to die? *sighs*
Just a side note, you should check over the chapter. You made a lot of your and you're mistakes in there. But over all, I'm still interested about this place... and story.

Dude, no! Not Jack! Please tell me he's alive and well. </3
I liked him so much...
Either he comes back from or there has to be another character that talks like him. I mean I LOVE THAT GUY!
... But yeah... this was good. I still don't know much about the creatures, but yeah.
O.O They do seem ugly though.

You comment made me giggle XD

Jack rubbed the back of his neck. "Your mate is gone,must of heard us."

Well, no snap Sherlock. What did they expect? Of course he heard them, they could have at least went into another room. O.O Story characters, I just love them <3

No, but this just got me even more interested. I want to know what Casseous is up to?
What did he mean by 'Recruiting them' (okay, I know what that one meant) and the whole 'they end up turning into those things'
What do they turn into?

So many questions O.O

Thanks,
Yeah I was planning on doing that but school doesn't give me enough time edit it.
And at home I have to do house work so i rarely get to edit things.

I like it :)
But, you should put paragraphs instead of letting it all mash up together like that.
You could have five paragraphs if you fixed it. It looks better if they aren't all mashed together like that.