Golden Boy - Comments

ugh, we all have a golden boy i think. damn golden boy.

nicely written, i like the poetic story structure (as mentioned above, haha). i think everyone can empathize, even boys have golden girls.

This was quite..poetic. The way you wrote it was very interesting and I liked it.
I read it a few times and at first, I thought maybe it was a dream she was having. She was dreaming about this Golden Boy and what not.
But then I thought it was about a break-up.
And now I'm just confused.
But either way, it was gorgeous. Your descriptions are amazing and you wrote this beautifully.
I liked the layout too.
Very lovely job! (:

Such a brilliant piece.
There's not much I can say that's already been said, you have great descriptions and this is just lovely to read.
Great job!

I remember my hands on your chest and your arms, twisting you and turning you, making up excuses to just feel your skin beneath my palms.

I love that line. This whole thing was very painful and nostalgic, like the character is trying to make sense of everything. And in a way, she is.

I love how poetic this is.
It's sad but it's beautiful and romantic.
Like the person above me said its relatable.
You captured a lot of emotion in so very few words.

This is kind of sad, if you think about it.
I loved it a lot though. It's just sad because everything felt so one sided. I think everyone can relate to this in one way or the other because everyone will always like someone more than that someone will like them. It always happens at one point or the other. That's why this is so sad, and really sort of beautiful to me. It's relatable.
This is seriously one of my favorite one-shots. Or drabbles, or whatever you want to call it.
The ones written late at night when you're tired are always the best, I think.
Anyways.... LIKE.

I am amazed.
I love the choice of words you used, and the way you kept repeating 'Golden Boy, and the way the narrator remembered all those things, in a way were the reader wonders if he remembers the same way and it adds this bitter sweet feeling to it. I loved the layout and the banner it went perfectly with the drabble. This is by far one of the best things I've read; you are very talented, and I really loved it.

i really like this
it's not biased as a regular break-up story is.
great job

The banner is gorgeous and makes we wonder what the story is going to be about. From the title alone, I know this boy is special in some way, so I’m really looking forward for that. I wish there was a more detailed summary to go off though. I also had to default the layout because to me the wording was very tiny, maybe my eyes are getting old, but the font is small something a little bigger would fix that though.

Okay, obviously I don't know you personally, but I express some ideas about your intentions on this, and after reading the first comment, I think I was wrong on all of it, but enjoy the review anyway.

I read this piece like four times, and every time with each read, my perspective changed about it. I thought the format you chosen to write this drabble in was clever. It came out more like a poem than a story narration, and that affect is greater and it open thoughts about who this golden boy was to the young woman. I loved mysterious pieces like these because if leaves the readers to use their imaginations on what’s going on. Whether or not you wanted it to be like this, your readers don’t really have much to go on, and sometimes that doesn’t always work, but this did.

Oh, Golden Boy. Memories of you. Your words. The scent of you. — I thought the beginning was beautifully written. To me it sounded like the narrator was reminiscing on this perfect boy in her eyes. First thought: this boy is dead and she was in denial. The girl reminded me of someone in high school who didn’t say much; she’s basically shy and felt as if she wasn’t good enough. This boy was popular and she liked him, to me this made sense because it happened all the time in high school – it was realistic. OR I could be absolutely wrong. Second thought: Love at first sight. I know I dream about beautiful looking boys who don’t even know I exist or know my name; you know something like a girly crush. I know whenever I see a cute guy in a magazine, he’s automatically my husband

Third thought: Was this “golden boy” even real, there was so much emotion in the words that it wasn’t a thought to pass up. All girls have that one boy real or not that is always perfect in their eyes and for some strange reason it gives comfort to teenage hearts that boys like that actually exist when deep down, not likely.

“I don’t remember your hands on me, so you must not’ve touched me, because I know I’d remember, but I remember touching you.” — This was why I thought he wasn’t real or that she didn’t really know the golden boy, but only physical attraction. I guess I would call this the twisting point because I didn’t see it coming. The ending was the best part I think and depressing in a way because only the girl (and you of course) knows the real truth behind the “golden boy,” so good job. Beautifully written, shot and sweet and keeps the readers wanting more after the last word is read.

Oh, wow. I really like this and I can totally emphasize with you.
It gets better over time. ^_^

Ohemgee, you wrote Golden Boy? I knew that I knew that I knew you.

Anyway, That was great. So is this "Golden Boy" just a general bad break up, or the under-tones of well, you know who? Either way it makes sense.

And honestly, sad as it is, that's how life goes sometimes. :|
Good job. ;)