two: the descriptions were excellent once again and wondering why ronnie couldn't tell that she also had no idea about the visit (he's so clueless). So wondering what's going to happen and how much damge is he going to give. Can't wait to read the next chapter.
Okay first off; the red link font can hardly be seen at all. Almost like it's blending into the black background (at least to me it is) and the grey story font is a bit better but sometimes it's still hard to read so may want to change both of those font colors to something else. Other than that the descriptions were excellent; gave the reader the feeling that they are there with her. Can't wait to read the next chapter.