I Can't Stay Away - Comments

I really liked it but... The chapters are really short and I was a bit confused with the 'Nicole' stuff... And it seems really rushed! Like she moves, then she has all these guys liking her all of a sudden. But I like the idea. I'm not really a professional and I'm not trying to be mean either but the story would be better off if you take it a little slow. I LOVE the plot though. :D

Update soon please!

Hi hi, I like the story. The idea kind of reminds me of the story I'm currently writing hahaha except different. Anyways, my only suggestion is spacing the paragraphs a little better. It's kind of mushed together and whatnot, sorry if you don't like constructive critism... I wasn't meaning to be rude or anything. From a writer to another. You know? Well good luck with the story! <3

cool im glad u like it 2 =)

i like this one too! :)

Omg, cuuuuuuute :3
I'm really sorry, but I have _no_ ideas ):

umm for ideas you could always try to get her close to one then have jake appear or you could try having jake coming sooner and make the other guys jelous and try to win her over just ideas if you like one go ahead and use it :D have fun!

I'll try 2 post more as soon as I can!! =)

thanks so much 4 the comments!!

like it i absolutly fricking LOVE it keep writing plz plz plz i'll love you forever and im serious :D

Looooove it so far.
please update soon.
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i like this story plz update sooooooooonnnnnnnnnn