Your extremities twist, thighed legs shift from dangling to stamping, your arms, high on stiletto, braces, fix in to protection. An instinct ain't it? Everything is fierce, it is moshing. A fight, just a war directed to everyone, specially to yourself.
^Strongest line in the story I think. The whole atomsphere was I wanted to say rough, but it wasn't. When you think of Moshing you think of people overflowing into one another. The last line of the one I stated fit perfectly to what I was talking about.
The descriptions were good and gave off a wonderfil image. The girl in the story you could kinda tell what her personally was like. A hard rocker and she likes that hard core shit, the way you talked about the music and club was really good,
Almost like she leads two lifes Mosher at night and beauty queen during the day kinda vibe. Great job.
Your extremities twist, thighed legs shift from dangling to stamping, your arms, high on stiletto, braces, fix in to protection. An instinct ain't it? Everything is fierce, it is moshing. A fight, just a war directed to everyone, specially to yourself.
^Strongest line in the story I think. The whole atomsphere was I wanted to say rough, but it wasn't. When you think of Moshing you think of people overflowing into one another. The last line of the one I stated fit perfectly to what I was talking about.
The descriptions were good and gave off a wonderfil image. The girl in the story you could kinda tell what her personally was like. A hard rocker and she likes that hard core shit, the way you talked about the music and club was really good,
Almost like she leads two lifes Mosher at night and beauty queen during the day kinda vibe. Great job.