In My Mind - Comments

This story is incredibly bizarre. I read the ending multiple times, to see if I wanted to read the story, and it didn't entirely make sense until I read the rest. Jocelyn is a confusing character that's hard to understand. I don't get why Harry and Draco fell for her, but everyone deserves to be loved.

I loved it! Held on to the end and it was amazing. First story I read like this and it didn't lack anything just wished it was longer.

Nice ending. You managed to sum it up without ruining the story. It gave us somewhere to go with our imagination without expecting anything in the future that would change it. One of the best ways to end a story without flames. Keep Writing.

Just finished reading this, finally. xD love it soooo much. :) <3

Alright, so YAY HARRY. I would've been so pissed if you ended it with her dying like that.

I think (this is just an idea) that you should do a thing, like a five years later epilogue, where she comes back to the wizarding world to see Kimmie and Zada, as well as Draco and Harry. Maybe make Harry or Draco married, or have both of them married.

Idk, something like that haha. Just an idea.

I'm sorry. I can't think of anything to write anymore. I did like that she did not die, though. Keep Writing.

Well, what do I write...? Thank you for using my idea. At least a part of it. I can't really help with the ending though. I'm hopeless at those. I've tried. They always end badly. Well, I hope that Joce gets better as I am unsure of whether I want her dead or not, 'cause you could always end with her funeral and Draco and Harry feeling bad. But that is just what some authors do if they can't do anything. Kill of the main character. Have fun finishing the story. Keep Writing.

Awe =] You're always welcome!!

Now hurry up and update! What the hell do you think you're doing? I know that curse damn well and someone better be popping up to shut that shit down RIGHT NOW.

(that someone better be Draco, just saying)

=]

Good Day to you!

I loved that chapter a lot. I could feel her emotions as she was waiting for Harry to kiss her =]

I also liked the way you described the rest of the feelings she was having. I think you do really well always describing how she's feeling and what she's thinking, because it really helps to get into the character.

And your welcome =]

Oh wow! I lost track of this one admist my craziness, and I just re-read the entire thing tonight!

To be constructive: there's quite a bit of grammatical errors in some of the chapters, as well as a few (very few) punctuation errors as well.

Other than that. HOLY CRAP UPDATE NOW! =] Kthanksbai

Hmmm, well if you want some help, then it might be nice for Joce try and figure out why Draco is holding out on her. But that is for a later time. Harry should follow after her after awakening from shock and and be put back into shock when he sees her new hair. Draco could get mad at her hair and ask her why she did it when he passes her a one time or another. She will retort that she can do as she pleases as they are not and item or something like that. I hope this helps.

I really love the perspective that you have writing this from. Awesome hp story!(:

so we have to comment if we want you to update. Okay.... nice chapter. I'm actually glad that these chapters are not long compared to others. It makes sure that I don't spend all day looking at one and get bored. Update soon. Keep Writing.

ThIs story is amazing, I can't wait for the next update

Cool. Can't wait for the next update.

I love this story, it's amazing. Honestly, it's been pretty life changing for me. At the end of this last chapter when Draco told her to smile, it reminded me of something I'm dealing with right now, and it's made me realize something. You're a great writer, keep it up :)

its amazing

well about bloody damn time woman!!!!!! I miss the updates ;)
fantastic, I know how you feel, my character is a little melodramatic right now too -.-

I love this. Please continue. What does she do now? Just let us know soon. I hope you can get inspiration soon. Can't wait for the next update.

It was just getting good, and then Draco had to come and intervene. Growl that boy has horrible timing. I can't wait for the next update!