Goodbye - Comments

i absolutely love this :)
it's very well written, and just descriptive enough. Really great.

I like that there wasn't a happy ending, most people would have made it so he decided he'd never leave her. I like that even though it's short it tells a lot. Like someone else said you don't even need to know why they're doing it, I think it'd be too much.
Love it :D

Wow.
I mean...
Wow.
I could feel the couple's past together during their heartwrenching breakup.
I didnt even need to know why he was leaving, the fact that he loved her so much was obvious.
It sort of reminded me of Dear John (the book ,not the movie) beacuse that is the same kind of thing the main character goes through.
Good job
:)

Aw. =[
I actually like the not-so-happy ending. Great job. =]

Thank you so much for attempting the prompt I gave. You actually really did it justice. I was expecting someone to write some sappy romantic story where the couple get back together in the end and have lots an' lots of "hawt sex". But this was different. This story was very much grounded in reality, because it's what a lot of people have to face all in the time. Not all couples get back together and live happily ever after in the and and you portrayed that well.

I liked how the male in the relationship was the one who actually had regrets about leaving, instead of the other one around. Usually in stories I've read here, they just cut their losses and never look back. But I liked how he so desperately held onto the past and wanted to be back with her again even though it was the wrong decision to make and he knew it.

My favourite line would have to be this, The hour passed in a haze of tear-soaked kisses.. It really stood out to me because no matter how tragic it is because of the situation, it always sounds kind of beautiful in a way. The way you described that whole break-up scene was amazing, actually, with the way you said she could of hit him or insisted he stay. It was written very, very well.

Towards the end I was definitely expecting him to go back to her, but then again, that goes with what I said earlier about that's how most stories like that on here go. I really liked how you chose not to go the cliched route with this because it could have potentially ruined it - depending on how it was written, of course. It could have been pulled off nicely, but I liked how it turned out instead.

I'm amazed this is your first piece of writing in three years because it's really very good! I saw no spelling or grammar errors at all and the story came together and flowed beautifully. Your portrayal of emotions was very well done. Overall, I quite enjoyed this piece and hope you continue to write.

Great story i almost started crying and i dont cry.

Arrggg! Why did he leave!? Really good, you should write more stories!