Something After - Comments

This is so mysterious and original. I like it. :]

Okay so I loved this.
I'm glad that I nagged you and you updated.
:)

Are you going to be updating this again any time soon? :/

The title and the picture go really well together. I like how the picture shows “the light at the end of the tunnel”. The blue background really sets off a mood to the story, calm but even a little sad.

This might be a little hard for me to read since a few of my friends just died in a car crash, but you never know.

Prologue:

I love your first sentence. It really is a good comparison that sticks with the reader and gives us a hook that makes us want to keep reading.

I like the repetition of the line I woke up in a hospital bed… It really gives us a picture of how little the character knows and what they are seeing.

Chapter One:

Your writing style is very poetic, very repetitive words that stress importance like the word “until” in this chapter.

I wish you could have described the voice more, what the words sounded like to the character so that we could also make our own assumptions and try to decipher it’s meaning.

I like how he realizes he isn’t alone. It brings up all kinds of questions. Is this other thing human? Is it someone he knows? Where is he? It’s a really good way to end a chapter.

Good God, that banner fits the story perfectly. It's so hauntingly creepy and real. :O I like the start you have here, where the character dying as soon as the first chapter opens. It's weird because you don't - well, actually on Mibba, you do - read a lot of stories that have a dead person telling them. I liked that, it gives this character of it's own. The empty feel of it all just has a scary real effect to it.

So far, thos looks..... really good. It's really creepy. And the picture is amazing.
I love how you started this, and I love how you repeat words, but just the right amount. Not too many times. It's perfect.

Oh my gracious.<3
This is the perfect Halloween story it seems even if you're not trying to aim it that way, aha. :) I just kept reading and reading and then gah!

I was stuck, at the mercy of whatever was so desperate to contact me.

That line just chills me to the very bone missy; especially after all that lovely detailed build up.
Your word choice is amazing, and I cannot believe this doesn't have a jillion comments.<3 The layout is very nice as is the story that accomapnies it.

But of course, I must ask for updates.<3
This is too nice not to. :)

I really like this. It's intriguing.

Great update!

Wow. This is... I don't know how to explain it (:
Just amazing!

The part in the second chapter, where she's realizing the voice is calling her name was pure brilliance. I loved it.

You're a very descriptive writer. I like it immensely.
This is a very well-written story.

Wow. I mean, wow.

"My life ended the way the universe began: with a big bang.."
That opener was phenomenal, and everything I read made me go 0o0o0.
It sounds so unique, and is phrased brilliantly: almost poetically.

first of all, i liked the originality of the piece. just from the description i knew right off that it would be interesting. when i actually started reading [by the way, the layout is awesome] it got even better. i was immediately caught up in your character's emotions. i was scared when they were scared, i was anxious and curious when they were as well. your writing style also adds to the fiber of the story.
it's a very unique story, and i really love it so far.

Title

Very simple, but very meaningful.

Layout

Lovely. It isn't very fancy, but still makes a reader smile.

Summary

Grabs the readers attention and makes them curious to the story. Perfect. =D

Story

Prologue: I like it. It gets you ready for the story at the same time as making you hunger for more. Just one small problem. The &&'s throw the story off beat. They don't look… right. I would reconsider them. =)

Chapter One: I was confused when reading this. Perhaps that was your intention? I don't know why, but this made me even more pulled into the story. The voice is pretty mysterious, and I like a good mystery. I can't help but wonder what the character's name is. Or what gender.

Chapter Two: Lovely descriptions. I loved how I could practically see what was going on, feel as confused as the character. Very nice affect. My favorite line was at the end: 'As I reached for this doors handle, I couldn’t help but feel I was playing with fire, bright and dangerous.'

Overall

This is a very nice story that should be updated very soon. For the first chapters you may want to go back and take out the &&'s to make the story look more professional. But update soon, okay? <3

This is not crap. No where near close. It's amazing.

I agree with Alexander. I love it still. :) Your detail is amazing although in some points it got a touch confusing. Other than that, It's lovely. C:

Don't you dare delete it.<3 C:
I love eeet.

This is so cool.
I loved the first line of chapter one, and the part in either chapter two or three (I can't remember) where you talked about how time was nonexistent.
Anyways, great job, I think I'll sub. :D

This was really amazing! Reminded me of Evermore a little bit; maybe because of the accident? Anyways, like I said, this was amazing :]

I like this a lot :) One thing that I suggest is separating with something other than & because it can confuse some people.

this is really amazing. i love the subtleness of it all, yet all the power rushing through every word written.absolutely beautiful <3

i love how you set up this story, its really easy to follow along but you're being artistic with words. This is very impressive.