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I literally just cried my eyes out. I hadn't expected it to be so soon either. It was so beautifully written. I loved it.

I just read this entire story, and I loved it. I cried, it was so sad :(

That dream was horrible. D: And at the end, when she's like, 'not yet, but soon', I was crying. I love this story so much. I can't wait for the next update.

I definitely cried. I love her personality. Thisis the best story I've read in awhile.

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Layout

It's good, not amazing, but not bad. I love the banner, It's my favorite part of the layout xD

Summary

The summary really caught my attention and made me want to read the story. I'm excited to get to reading it now! xD

Chapter 1

She immediately started talking about herself and where she was from all while grabbing a pair of scissors and cutting right into the frog.
This is a great line. It really gives a lot of her personality, and already I feel like I know her with the story you told in this paragraph.

She walked onto the stage as if she owned it, smiled down at the director and the choir teacher as if she were sharing some secret with them, and opened her mouth, belting out into a song from some musical I didn’t know.
I absolutely adore how confident she is. She's the type of character who everyone wants to be, you know?

No errors so far that I can pick out! Yay!!

Chapter 2

It was a lot like the hum of the air conditioning, you get so used to it while it’s there, the silence is deafening when it’s gone.
Your descriptions absolutely amaze me. They are so vivid and well-written!

“Well, I have been a bit sick for the past few weeks, but it’s nothing to worry about. I will be feeling fine soon enough.” She had said it with such confidence that I believed her.
Ahh! Foreshadowing! You do that so well, too! :D

Again, no mistakes! :D

Chapter 3

I promise I'll stop after this one! It's just so good! XD

There would be moments where I would look at her and see the girl who was going to be on Broadway, and then she would cough and it would rack her body until all I could see was the frail girl who was going to die.
Now you've got me about to cry! D;

“I want to travel the coast of California.” She said it calmly and casually, as if she was mentioning the weather or that she liked the shirt I was wearing.
I love how she can mention this so casually! Just another thing I love about this character. :D

It was the least I could do for it.
Did you mean “It was the least I could do for her.”?

It was all I could do for her. That killed me.
I know how that one feels... I can relate to Jack so well and it just intensifies with this paragraph.

Overall

*Subscribes*
I love this!! You are amazing at detail, and I only caught the one sentence in the third chapter. Amazing story from an amazing writer! I'll be reading. :D

D: Why must you make me cryyyy? That was such a deep and just...beautiful chapter. I loved it so much, though it pains me that they won't get to stay together, and live a happy life. D: Gah.

Alice, why must you make me cry? That was beautiful. I knew the kids issue would come up (as would Jack's) and you handled it well. But when he sang and I was what song you chose, I lost it.

Gah. This story...it makes me so sad, but so happy at the same time. It's beautiful, and horrible (not horribly written. xD) at the same time. It's...everything. I love it so much. :D

I read this yesterday and took some time to gather my thoughts about it.

I still have no words. This story stumps me that way - I'm just plain speechless in the best way possible.

Love this so far, honestly. I love your writing style, it's so straight forward and ... raw man. I also love the characters. Estella seems like a nice kind of person -- you know, one that I would probably want to know. I also love their faces, but you probably know that already.

So yes, this is fantastic. :)