July 5th, 2010 at 06:50am
I'm not sure about who the brother's are, but all I know is, dayum gurl.
You are an extraordinary writer. And I would give anything to have skills like yours.
The best I can do is edit, and make things better, but you, you have the ability to write so beautiful. From "Lost & Found." To "Monster." To "The Wasted Days."
Hah, all I'm saying is that you're a great writer and maybe someday you can be a famous author. :D
Your writing style is very fluid and full of emotion.
However, I will say that it was a bit strange for me, not having much of an idea of what was going on.
You constructed a piece that was purposefully confusing and did it well, so I had no complaints.
I will mention, though, that no matter how many times I read it, this sentence didn't seem to compute:
"I hear his loud footsteps make their way into the empty nothingness my room and everything in it has become."
I'm thinking that it's a run-on, easily fixed by adding a dash after "nothingness." Yeah, that would make more sense.
Anyway, altogether this was a wonderfully written entry. Great job. (: