Leah’s character seems a lot more upbeat and peppy compared to the way she was in the books…Did she have an epiphany in the years before the story begins? Although you say that she’s lived for thirty years, she’s kind of immature. It makes her character less believable.
I’d recommend you write more about the events that have occurred in the ten years before your story began so that readers can have a better understanding of why Leah’s personality has changed so drastically.
OMG SCARY MOVIE!!! 28 weeks later.... Scary... I'm afraid of zombies.... oh and I like your story... I'm one of those people that get off topic as you can tell... I think.... I wanna cookie!
I am in love with this story and I've barely read 5 chapters. You really sound like if this was written by the original author herself and I just can't wait to keep reading.