Ena Ellinikos Skantalo - Comments

Def meant to message that to you LivesTooShort52. Sorry! :)

The description of jake a vague on purpose. And there isn't much plot that happens until Vegas, which is coming soon, it all falls into place in Vegas. Thanks though. :)

Chapter Kefálaio Enós:
Try to explain what Jake turned into a little more... The story is slightly rushed. Slow it down but adding more plotline. You have enough details - for now -

okay so as i was scrolling down the stories' page your title got my instant attention!
and if u go to my profile u'll figure out why in probably 2 seconds. :)
so, anyway, i can help with the language if u want. xD

ok well first im gonna get to some points.

1. if your talking about greek mythology you absolutely have to tell the tale of the trojan war an the war against the titans.

2. there are key gods you NEED to put in.(i.e. zues of course and hades just for the sake of the fact that they are brothers.)

3.an if you do put in those god there also has to be the creatures lyk cereberus and cyclops.

4.i know exactly what tha sword fight coulda used. it coulda used a bit more action ypu had the suspend part with maci an alex but wit a little more trick an wha not it'll be fine, maybe even a couple cuts on the leg or a couple cuts somewhere to show that they were going at for a while.

5.you can even go as far as explaining how even gods mess up(i.e. why the seasons change on earth because hades forceably married her) see point 1&2

i know its still early in the story but your doin good court court hope tc gets in it jus follow your tricept an yull b alright

love an miss yu

-cail(hahahaha that always makes me laugh)

I would like to read more
Update soon, please =D