Your layout kind of gave me a headache. :\ The lack of space between lines (not paragraphs, individual lines) was too smushed together. I had to change it to the default layout.
This was super cute. I loved the way you phrased everything; it was really vivid, and I could easily picture it.
your story is really cute! i could picture every scene perfectly in my head due to your awesome descriptions, which in turn made me jealous i dont have a boyfriend like that. the way her feeling were described was great. the only issue i had was that the last paragraph was a bit rushed but it was still great!
This was super cute. I loved the way you phrased everything; it was really vivid, and I could easily picture it.
You did a good job. :]