Afterglow - Comments

You need to got through and edit...this line didn't sound well "black lace skimpy outfit" it should also have commas between each verb. Bella was ment to have died...so she shouldn't be ble to see her friends. I think it needs a bit of work...let me know if you change anything I'd love to read it.

i like it please keep going. :D

wow u have come a long way. i freakin love it.

i love it! hope they don't die <3

love it! ohh whats gonna happen!

i love it! you are doing great with this story <3

wonder what timmy wants to talk about?????

keeps getting better yes I think I mean thow old is renesmee supposed to look when she starts "dating" Jacob?

how old is renesmee supposed to look in the end part?? love this story by the way <3

havent read it all yet but love it ha ha Jacob under the bed I nearly p***** myself

D: CLIFF HANGER CUN CUN CUN whats gonna happen?

hey i updated ma stories....
i made a new one as well.
The Angel Who Spoke!
Check it Out!

Sucks that you haven't gotten any comments lately. I love the story so far! Renesmee's P.O.V is very new and interesting, I've never read a story yet where the author has thought of that. Keep going!

POST MORE PLZ

its good! i like it! read my story, its intensee

like it! post more!

I like it lots i love the story!

WOW UM REALLY?

....Hmm....
This reads like Stephenie Meyer's writing style.
Interesting....

wow! i love this so far post more!