Delirious - Comments

Aww, really romantic ;)

wow i loved it , it was so inoccent and romantic :)

I really loved how you captured Harry’s emotions in this fic. His longing is so evident, permeating all the aspects of the story.

I found one small spelling mistake but that was all. In the penultimate paragraph “Were were you?” should read “Where were you?”.

The way you consistently linked nature to Draco was an excellent addition. His eyes being the colour of the sky really helped to bring them to life and made them stand out as an important feature.

The one-word sentences at the end of the first paragraph also struck me as being particularly effective. As the sentences got shorter, it was as if Harry’s thinking was speeding up, the thoughts just falling over one another as he remembered more.

This was cute, but sad...