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  • amazing_love34

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    I like it! That's an awesome English aglssignment!
    July 17th, 2010 at 05:46am
  • Annalia

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    I actually like how you jump into the beginning and leave out the boring stuff lol.
    I like this story :)
    She's right about making new paragraphs, though.
    June 20th, 2010 at 11:43pm
  • opiate.

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    I thought this was really cool. :)
    I would suggest, if you really want to make this into a real story, to give some info before he actually goes into the future. Like, lead up to the events and explain how it happened.
    Also, each new person talking is a new paragraph.
    But really cool job on the setting ... Haha, twentieth Harry Potter movie. :P
    June 15th, 2010 at 09:30pm
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