Fear's Hand Wasn't Meant to Hold - Comments

Beautiful and heartbreaking and...I don't have words.

Thanks so much. I'll keep the dialogue thing in mind for the future. :)

That was absolutely amazing. The emotion described in this was enough to really make me feel it myself. I felt like I could see and feel everything that the narrator was seeing and feeling, to the point where it made me a little dizzy. You are an amazing writer with a tremendous amount of talent and I greatly enjoyed reading this. The absolute only bad thing I could say about this is the lack of quotation. But it was an amazing piece of writing.

Thanks for entering!

It was great.
I really liked it.
It was really descriptive,
about the fear thing.
:)

Thanks. :)

holy shit that was intense. really, really good.

Thank you so much! I really appreciate it. Thanks for the opportunity as well. Thanks again. :)

First, thanks so much for entering our contest.

I fucking loved this. I normally hate sad things, but near the end you captured fear so well, so perfectly. I can't even put my thoughts into words right now. I didn't notice any grammar or spelling mistakes either, which is a major plus for me. Your words were so descriptive and placed well, making it flow together perfectly and expertly. I think telling it from the father's point of view was amazing, the perfect choice, and the fact that you could sort of tell the beautiful naivety a toddler experiences even in times of danger was great. The way you described what was going on in his mind... God, I can't get over it. I loved it.

Truly superb job. <3