They Should've Known - Comments

^. I just totally realized this was the prompt I gave in that prompt thing. lol. >.< Good use of my prompt. XD

One shot for one shot.

I felt like this could've used slight more detail.
You could have much more description.
But the words you used were excellent.
It was fantastically emotional.
There were a few parts that didn't flow as well as they could.
But othweise, it was very nicely done.

I was a little confused, but in a good way! You had me guessing. It had a vague but still very emotional quality to it, and you tied up all the loose ends at the end. Not too drawn out. I like the setting too, creepy.
Definitely a great story.

I really liked this. I liked the fact that we didn't know their relationship or who they had lost until the end. Nice work. :)