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  • SHYLA01

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    This is well written and well done, I enjoy reading it :)
    June 21st, 2010 at 11:53am
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    This is awesome!!!
    I love it! :)
    Moremoremore!!!
    *Subscribes*
    June 21st, 2010 at 10:55am
  • Lunacy.Fringe.

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    Okay, nevermind, false alarm! I hit the refresh button and it let me read it!! Yay!

    Okay, so I found a few spelling and grammar errors in Chapter 2. Just thought I'd let you know.

    “He’s only fourteen, don’t pay attention to him, he’s going thru puberty and his hormones are off of the wall.” - Should be through.

    “Well, maybe I don’t want to live like this anymore,” Adrienne told him in serious tone, “I want some stability in my life and for my kids, I went them to actually have a father that’s around to see them do things. You miss everything!” - Should be want.

    “And besides, no one’s too old to toke up, when we run of this I know where to get some more, I’ve got connections, you don’t smoke daily, do you? That would be fucking insane if you did.” - Should be run out of.

    Well, that's all I saw so far.
    I really love this!
    I'm so happy I stumbled across it!!
    I'm definitely subscribing!
    June 21st, 2010 at 07:53am
  • Lunacy.Fringe.

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    Mibba wouldn't let me read Chapter 2.[A photo of Kanye West popped up...Wtf?]...I'm sad now... :'(

    Message it to me?

    This is friggin' brilliant so far! I really hope you continue it!
    June 21st, 2010 at 07:42am
  • shesmywynonna

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    love it :)
    June 21st, 2010 at 06:37am
  • ZACKYVLOVESME!

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    hot chick, big tits! funny as hell
    June 20th, 2010 at 11:14am
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    “And some hot chick with big tits is with him, too!”- LMFAO!

    “What the fuck? You’re not eighteen, you little shit,” Billie said as he walked up to them and looked at Jewel, “He’s only fourteen, don’t pay attention to him, he’s going thru puberty and his hormones are off of the wall.” - That whole paragraph made me laugh. tehe Especially the last part.

    “Tre, don’t through food, act your age, for crying out loud.” - I think 'through' should be throw. :D

    Woah, that's a tense convo between Adrienne and Billie Joe. D:

    “LET’S GET THIS PARTY STARTED!” Tre Cool’s voice roared - Hahaha. Good old Tre.

    About an hour after being on the road, Jewel threw her bag on her bunk and looked for her little bag of Mary Jane. - That's my favorite slang for marijuana. ~Random fact about me. XD

    “I went through that faze - I think that 'faze' should phase. :)

    This is really good! I liked it alot. You're a pretty good writer. :D
    June 19th, 2010 at 09:45pm
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