Broken. - Comments

This was amazing :3 I loved the emotion you put into two short chapters and I'd love to see more because I can see a kind of plot emerging. Though I might be making it honour of nowhere. The language and concept you used were stunning and I think this is my favourite of your pieces, if you leave like this or not.

It's still very interesting, and it has a good opening in case you want to make it a "story" story. Lol.
This seems like a good time because of that tad of background info.
;]

i like this :D its different. in a good way of course.
it makes you think about things...

Aww, I really like this - both chapters. Sad, but beautiful.

I hope you continue it. You could make it longer, with the chapters narrated from the dead boy's POV. I think that would be really interesting, and it's not very common either.
Or you could just leave it where it is, if you want, 'cause it's good as it is.

But yeah, I hope you continue it as it's got a lot of potential.
(:

You should deff continue I really love it <2+1
JAzz

You should continue this, of course.
I love reading anything of yours, because of the emotion & detail you always put into it.
I'll be subscribing. (:

Wow, this is beautiful, amazing, and sad :)
I love it, I'd love to have to continue this story :)
Keep writing, if you will :)

Congrats, you won third place! (:
Message me the link to your other story you want me to comment.

That was sad, but still beautifully written.
I'd very much like it if you continued this.
Great job, and good luck in the contest. (:

Wow, that was actually really nice.
You should definitely continue this. Very interesting lol =]

That was really sad but very beautiful, deff subscribing, just incase you do decide to keep writing it. Love it lots, keep writing<3
much love
JAzz<3

This was so sad, but truly beautiful. <3
I'd love to see where this goes if you decide to continue it!