Thank you! I'll check that.
July 2nd, 2010 at 01:17am
I really love your story so far, and I've only read the first chapter yet. :)
You've applied so much effort into this. And I can't wait to read the next chapter! :D The way you use your words is very good, and I like the fact that you don't use particular words again and again. Your descriptions are SO beautifully detailed. I love that in a story!
By the way, I think that your story layout is simple, ye pretty!
However, I saw some mistakes and you missed out some important punctuation, like at the end of the characters' dialogues, you missed out many commas/fullstops. Each line of dialogues have to be completed.
For e.g;
- In the ninth paragraph: “That wasn’t a very friendly bunny(comma)” she gasped.