Inhale. Exhale. Breathe. - Comments

A guarded barrier placed between reality and fantasy, blurring the edges, turning every ordeal into something bearable.

That was my favorite line from the whole story. You conveyed a schizophrenic-like narration with this story; the way you structured your sentences was so tangled and it gorgeously conveyed the madness inside your character's mind.

I'm really baffled by the way you managed to write this. It's nothing like those angsty stories about mental diseases; it has its own flow and its own unique narration style.

Overall, it was amazingly written; no mistake caught my attention so you're clear on that. The plot and narration styles are so vivid and real and you make it really easy for the reader to put themselves in your character's shoes and feel that power, and then the fear of losing control.

It was amazing, Chan.

That was my first reaction to this. You drew me in from the first line.
Everything about this was impeccable. Your writing style is absolutely amazing.
To be able to grow numb, just with the bat of a lash.
That was one of my favorite lines. This oneshot was beautiful.
It was so...amazing. Sorry, I'm gushing, I know, but it was amazing.

This was beautiful Chan! Just.....whoa.
Speechless. Really speechless. Beautiful descriptions, and I just loved everything about it. <3

Oh my lord. This is brilliant.

I mean it, every image and feeling jumps from the screen and it's all developed perfectly.

It was written so well and I just plain love it.