Pieces - Comments

I /loved/ it. I was a bit iffy in the beginning, but it got better. I could feel the emotion in it and it was really well written. (: From what I could tell, there were no spelling mistakes and not many grammar mistakes.

MUCH better! I love it!!!!

I think that this could be really good... actually, it probably is. The only problem is that the first paragraph was so boring, I didn't read the rest of it. I loved the first like, three sentences, but after that it was redundant and... well, boring.

<3
Lauren