& What Would We Have to Sing About Then? - Comments

I really loved this story. It was perfectly written. But I'm just wandering, are Ryan and Z dating? I mean in real life. Cause I've heard lots of stories with them dating... but never mind.
So yeah, I really loved it.

Title: The title is cute, but seems a bit too long for me. It still fits the story though from what I can tell and works well, even though.

The layout is also great and isn't threatening to give me a headache anytime soon.

The whole plot behind the story seems really real, unlike other stories I've read along the same lines.

The thoughts processing in the plot also seem extremely clear to me. They're portrayed in a way that fits perfectly in what you've written and thought about. There's a realistic theme behind them which works extremely well.

"but I'm not your type. And even if my anatomy matched your preference, I still wouldn't be your type.

Because your type is pretty damn specific."

I really loved that line, I thought it worked with the thoughts going through her head quite realistically. It also showed the irony behind the whole relationship.

Overall I think the whole story itself was brilliant! It showed a whole lot of heartbreak and emotion, and you wrote it in such a captivating way that I could almost feel for Z.

It definitely was an amazing two shot. :)
And I apologize for not adding this from the story review game to your comment thread as soon as I should have.

Oh, I need to add something because I started thinking about it.

Ryan stumbled over to the bed, dropping the page from her journal next to her on the bed and putting his hands on either side of her face, forcing her to look at him. He knelt in front of her, their faces so close together that she could feel his breath. "How about . . ." He let his fingertip trace her jawline, voice gentle. "How about you keeping your fucking mouth shut, baby?" He kissed her, hard, enough to make her wince. "We're happy, right? We're happy. Why can't you just be fucking happy?!"

I was seriously scared for Z right there. I don't know why but I felt like Ryan was going to hurt her and that would've just broken me.

I wish I could write like you Dru. <3

Dru, I want to cry. That was so beautifully hear breaking. I love how she knows she can't do anything but isn't going to give up. It was just perfect. And you displayed Z wonderfully.

Because your type is pretty damn specific.

Brendon.

:')

This is amazing.
Holy crap.
I love that even though it focuses a lot on Ryan and Z, I love the little subtle hints of Brendon.
Ah. Wow.
You're a great writer! :D

Wow. That was just. Wow.
I love the emotion of Z and how heartbroken she is over Ry being gay but, she can't leave him because she loves him too much to do so.
Ryan's emotion played out incredibly well too.

Well done Momma, well done :)

New story.
Two-shot, but written as a oneshot.
It just worked better separated.
Characters are Ryan and Z, with past!Ryden and "tentative" Ryan/Z.
~2000 words.

Happy [?] reading!

xoxox
-Dru

P.S. Thank you in advance for every comment and every review.