Wildebeests - Comments

This was very well written.
The last two chapters kinda depressed.
It was hard to read at some points, leaving me a little lost.
But besides that minor detail. I liked it.
Good job(:

I adore this. I'm glad you entered this into my contest. :')
It's very beautiful, so well written, so heart wrenching. I almost cried. :'/
Anyway, well written, well done. <3

I thought the descriptions in this were beautiful, but it was a little hard to follow at times.
I loved all of the almost raw emotion you put into this, and the end of the second chapter made me tear up a little. I also enjoyed it because flow-wise, it was easy to read and flowed naturally.

I read the first chapter so far, I think it's really good. I'm going to continue reading when I get a chance to get back on this computer lol.

Like Acid Milk, I'm not a major femmeslash reader, but this was really cute :3

This was good. I like your layout and the plot. I don't really like femmeslash, but this wasn't a bad read. Keep up the good work!

This was beautiful. I loved every word of it. The ending... I loved it.

If you could change the font, it'd be easier for people to read :) Try something like times or arial?
Otherwise, I like it. Nice flow. Everything works well ;)

This was a good story, I liked the layout and the plot. The writing came easily to me, and I enjoyed reading it.

I really like it. It's kinda got this chill vibe.(:

The text, was to funky for me to read, so I changed it to the default layout.
I like it though.
The first chapter was all light and cuddly. It was really fluffy.
Then in the second chapter it gets intense.
I like it. As silk tea. said, it flowed nicely.

Just so you know it's Wildebeests.
Also, the text was really, really difficult to read.
So I had to switch back to the default layout just to read it.
It was good, and it flowed very nicely together.

I love the way you make it feel.
It's amazing!
Keep writing!

The layout text was hard for me to read, but I loved story. The words flowed very nicely together.

This has almost a dream like feel to it, which is a good thing.
It seems like you put a lot of thought into the wording.
Keep it up!

Well first off, the layout was nice with the exception of the fantasy text. It was really small and I couldn't read it and had to go to the default layout.

I'm not a big fan of femme slash, but I liked the way you put a lot of detail into this. I'm not exactly sure what's happening right now with the story plot, but keep it up.

I wished this night would never end as Annese got on top of my and took off her shirt.
you me top of me (:
Wow, once again... this is great :D