Favorite Girl - Comments

  • XstarnightX

    XstarnightX (100)

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    Okay so I know I already left a comment, but here's more detailed one.

    Okay so first off, I didn't really enjoy the layout, the purple and blue contrast hurt my eyes. Go with lighter tones next time.

    I liked how you made it seem she wasn't good enough for him, and how they switched from POV's so you got the real feel of each character. I wasn't the biggest fan of the 'happily ever after' cliche, but that's all good.

    There were a few grammatical errors, that can be fixed if you just re-read it.

    You have potential, and this could have been a great entry instead of just a good entry. Thank you for entering and winners should be posted soon, sorry about the long wait. Good Luck!
    August 26th, 2010 at 03:25am
  • bella11356

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    Hey! A great new Justin Bieber Fan Fiction site has recently launched! It's very organized and easy to post, keep track of your reads and reviews, and find other good JB stories! Visit www.JustinBieberFanFiction.com to register and start posting! It's free and easy! Hope to see you there!

    ~JBFF Admin
    June 24th, 2010 at 09:24pm
  • XstarnightX

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    so i really liked this, it was sweet and cute.
    June 22nd, 2010 at 09:42am