That stuff about the girls' moms is very relatable.
At the moment it feels like there are three different stories and I'm just wondering how they'll tie together. You've done that well before. (Like shit-my-pants, awed-and-shocked-for-weeks well xD)
I see you went back to past-tense, like you said. it works since there's a different narrator but you should definitely keep practicing present ^_^
Well I feel bad for her but damn I'm looking forward to the rest of this =D I guess I'm the only one not concerned by who did it lol probably because I'm not that into a7x lol I guess I'd like to know...