Suffocation - Comments

Wow, this was pretty intense. Your descriptions were great; I can easily picture this woman. I love the banner and the clean, simple layout – the only suggestion I would make to it would be to make the font a little smaller, but that’s a personal preference. Onto the story, it’s very powerful and well written and unfortunate in the end that she passes away, but maybe that’s better off, y’know? I’m very curious as to what this woman’s condition is and how she’d gotten to the point in which she was at during the story since you don’t really go into that. However, it’s still a great story – good job.

Jeez, I think you've beat me at being the dribble queen.
Seriously. I'm in awe of yours. It kind of makes me jealous to be completely honest with you.
And I'm going to slap you because of it. >.<

I'd just like to apologize in advance, I'm not very good at commenting/reviewing. And now onto the actual comment.

I actually had to read this two or three times before I could think of what to say.
I like how descriptive you are, how you didn't go into too much detail but gave the reader just enough to make a good picture. I also like how you left the situation unexplained and completely up to the reader to interpret how the woman got there, why she was how she was, etc.
The ending kind of got me, I wasn't really expecting that despite the banner.

In short, I think this is a great piece of writing.