August 29th, 2010 at 04:56am
You immediately got to the point, and I liked that.
I also liked that you used the same sentence again a few times. Years pass, and I grow and grow and grow. I loved that.
In the beginning, I felt so sorry for the girl. I hate the father with all I have, and the mother, too. You don't leave your baby girl behind like that! I don't class her as a mother, actually.
As the story went on, and the girl grew, I got a little happier. I was so glad that she realized she is someone, and that she's lovely.
I love her reaction at the end. Just telling her father everything and then going away. Leaving him behind, almost dead, and never looking back.
You did an amazing job <3 I loved it!
Emotional and dark and even a little haunting.
I really liked the repetition of "Years pass, and I grow and grow and grow." It really connected the entire piece, it kept it coherent.
I loved the ending as well.
Amazing job.