July 9th, 2010 at 11:50pm
I loved this. Very very very much.
You're an amazing writer. (:
“I love you, doesn’t that matter?” He whispered, hot on my face.
“It does,” I whimpered. “I’m afraid, Tommy.”
“You don’t have to be anymore. I came back for you, which has to mean something, right?”
I'm in love with these lines.
Good luck in the contest, even though I entered it too. :D
-smacks head-
Did I not comment this? I thought I did... Guess not... Oh well, then here it goes:
I really like the way you write.
I love what you came up with for your letter too! Creative :]
I think my favorite line in this story is: “I’m not asking for forgiveness! I just want you back in my life.”
I don't know why, but I just love it.
I love how you portrayed Ezra's emotions and how you created his character.
Your grammar and spelling were excellent - major brownie points for that!
I really enjoyed reading this story.
Thank you for your entry! Good luck!