June 14th, 2011 at 08:32pm
Aww, that was cute!
I really liked that you stuck to the song, it was really clear that you actually read the lyrics and didn't just copy/paste them in random spots.
The only thing I'd say though, is that it jumps along pretty fast. There can never be too much details, and a little elaboration here and there would've been awesome.
All in all, it was very good! First entry given, it has me all excited! :D
PS: I know I forgot to mention it, but can you please put the link to the contest in your summary? Of course, it won't have any effect on judging, it's my own fault I didn't say it sooner :)
i also loved that you stuck with the story! made the story cuter in a way!
the ending was adorable and it was great over all!