Desperate Cage - Comments

Great update! Loved it.
I hope they're gonna be together, 'cause Stephanie obviously likes her.

I like this (:
Great update!

I really liked the chapter.
I'm wondering where this will be heading. I feel kinda sorry for her (:

Other then the "queer" and "faggot' comments from the little kids, I found this to be amazing.

It's a beautiful story about teenage acceptance.
And how horrible kids can be.
And how tough it can be to be comfortable with yourself.
This was amazing.

I am commenting on this story since I have already commented on With Songs In Trees.
In the beginning of the first chapter, aren’t those kids young? I don’t think kids that young will be calling people “queer” or “faggot”.
Overall, I really liked this. I certainly have never read anything like this on here. It was wonderful!

The first chapter made me PISSED.
But overall this was great :3

To tell you the truth, it was rushed xD I'll revise it once the contest is over.

Thank you for entering this in my contest!

I liked the plot idea, but the whole thing seemed a little bit rushed. Once I started reading it I got really excited for the originality and the first chapter really set me up for a great ending, but it seemed too expected. I just feel like there should have been more closure, or maybe something else to shake things up a little. Overall, the story wasn't that bad. I also feel as if the use of the picture was just an after thought, and it felt a little disconnected from the story itself and didn't really work in my perspective.

Your score (out of ten):
Use of Picture: 7.8
Plot: 8.2
Writing: 8.9

This gives you a grand total of:
24.9 out of 30!

Not that bad! Good luck against the other participants!